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~General Information~

Name: Ruin Tentu Amizaru

Nickname/Alias: Leader of Death, Annihilator, Angel of Hatred, Fire Demon, Chained Alchemist, Chaos Incarnate.

Weight: 210lbs (w/o chain extra) || 310lbs (w/ chain extra.)

Height: 6' 2" (W/o chain Extras), 6' 4" (w/ chain extra)

Age: 19(Looks.) || 1650(actual.)

Gender: Male

Appearance:

Casual Appearance.

Ruin's Casual appearance is based off of some of the Narame's special features. Having almost ears of a Neko and a Tail of one too, he has inherited only some parts of the Narame bloodline due to a slight affair about 3 generations back with his great Grandmother. Within his black hair, Neko ears, and hair everywhere else, his main attribute for his dark nature comes from whatever color he enjoys most. Since Black is his natural color, which didn't change very much. With slight motions beyond the coloration of his hair, his features are nearly perfect, even for someone of his age. Since he is of Amizaru bloodline fully, he can live for hundreds of years, and have a Casual appearance of only 19 years old. His eye color is of a black or a blush red color. His normal set of clothing for either going out for fun, or just something as random as anything, he wear a regular formal shirt and a pair of black jeans or pants. With this, he may look a bit attractive to the opposite sex.

Beyond that, Ruin has a set of teeth that make him almost like a Vampire. These teeth are sharp and are located on the two side-teeth on the sides of the jawline where the end of the lips are. These teeth only show when he grins or smiles a bit brightly. He prefers not smiling or grinning, so his teeth are usually hidden from sight. Due to his perfectly chiseled features, he is able to hide the location of his fangs as well. As like many Vampire-like beings, these teeth can be used as a very close-range weapon when his body is not usable for attack.
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Battle Appearance.

Ruin's Battle appearance is of a Unique shifting ability. Within battle, he will shed the coating on the Arm mechanisms he will wear, and turn them into something that will look like a black Gauntlet. This black gauntlet can easily be shown as having a claw on each finger, a metal coating, a simple metal coating, and having a special small spike on the elbow part of the area. These items can easily be used as Close-range weapons, or chakra-channeling devices. Within the metal of the Arm mechanisms/Gauntlet, lies a small part of Narusu Crystal, a crystal in the birthright of the Narame clan. They were specially made to absorb some chakra with ease. But not most then a B or C rank jutsu.

Other than his Mechanisms, he is able to shift his Physical appearance in such a way that he looks like a Full Demon. His hair will usually be headbanded to have arched edges of hair about 4-8cm from the hairline. This will part about in two directions within just a motion of something. While in such a battle Appearance, the hair will look like they have been styled in small portions of hair. His eyes will become black with the eye color being of a golden or Silverish tinting.
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Second Form Appearance.

Explained Below.

Clothing: Refer to Above

Personality: Ruin prefers to be alone most of the time, usually spending his time outside or near moonlight or a beautiful area. He thinks to himself on a very good occasion, and keeps his secrets to himself. His personality most of the time outside of battle is quiet, dark, and extremely unfriendly when he feels the need to. Around women, or pretty girls, he gets only slightly shy, and may lose track of his words and become stuttering, or maybe a bit shy in blushing. Usually when he knows a girl very well, he'll be casual and a bit loving, maybe a bit more, but he doesn't really know. Being near a crush can hesitate his movements, or anything else, which is dangerous for him in battle.

While in battle, he can usually clear his mind of distractions and attack head-on, or attack from a distance and use his 'Chain' jutsu to trap and kill if he wanted to. Due to his extreme prowess in battle, he's able to predict movement, move accordingly, and land a striking blow with a countering or parrying move if needed. His power is able to reach limits beyond mere humans, and can utilize his wings as pivots in the air, and can move while flying, even when dropping when moved correctly. He's a dangerous, yet useful ally in battle.

Voice: Ruin's voice is not that of a child's, his voice inspires fear in his adversaries, his roar the sound of death itself. When speaking, it would have the intensity to feel like he were a demon. It's intimidating, dark, and overall fearful.

~Clan Information~

Clan Name: Amizaru

Kekei Genkai: Makaiame - Hell's Rain.-

Clan Symbol: N/A

Clan History: -

Ability Summary: Immortality, Extreme Use of Fire, Long lives, Eternal Youth.

~Rank/Village Information~

Classification: Akatsuki Leader

Letter Rank: S

Village: Getsugakure no Sato.


~Skill Information~

Skill Specialty: Fuuinjutsu, Weaponry.

Elemental Affinity: Katon[Fire Release], Doton[Earth Release.]

Special Characteristics: Makaiame, (1)Intense Strength[+20%], (1)Demonic Wings(Makaiame trait.), (2)Black Chakra.


(1) Intense Strength[+20%]

Due to intense strength-training methods, he is able to use 20% more strength than normal shinobi. For example, he can use his bare hands to lift something more easily than someone with average strength can, and hit more damage onto an opponent with physical attacks.

(2) Demonic Wings.[KKG.]

Due to the Amizaru Bloodline, Ruin has the ability to utilize his wings for flight, and for slight protection. Since the bloodline is normally demonic in nature, the wings have a small fashion of black scale and feathers along the skin and bone structures. The feathers are a smooth shade of both red and black, the top part of the claw on the very top of the structure of his wings, allows close-range combat if the opponent is on the ground, and in the range of half a meter from either wing. This 'Talon' is formed simply of bone tissue, and is durable. But, it is easily broken with enough force or a slashing force to it.

The flight part of the wings allow simple flight when in Ruin's 'Second' form. The main rest of the description of the wings are shown below on (6).


(3) Black Chakra.

During a countless battle with his own chakra, he had developed the chakra color of rage and purity. Black Chakra. This was more detailed to be developed through intensive training in the darkest regions of the world, with the area swarming with crystals of all colors, shapes and sizes. It helped build concentration and prepare Jutsu within a moment's notice. A sharp mind, true chakra abilities, and darkness to boot. He had completed his Chakra training after gaining this color.

(4) Spike Arm Mechanisms.

Ruin's Arm spike mechanisms are used on both of his forearms, the locks and latches being located below the wrist, and travel all the way up to the elbows, the straps being located under his clothing, or if not, over them. The mechanisms have 2-3 specific unlocking mechanisms, and a large main spike, located in the center of each. The two are identical in all ways but the elemental brand on them. The left Mechanism has a 'Doton' or Earth brand on the center of the main spike, giving him extra abilities with the Doton element in certain ways, and the same way on his 'Katon' or Fire elemental brand on his right mechanism. The spikes are released upon a status of vibrations within it. If a pulse of muscles end up forcing the mechanisms forward or back, the spikes will release and lock themselves in a 1 1/2m long Materite spike, each. These spikes are extremely hard to break, none the less to touch. The seals are invisible to the naked eye, but can be seen when Ruin preforms the elemental jutsu of his choice.

(5) 'Second' Form.

A secretive, yet highly dangerous to Ruin's overall health, stature in battle, and health after release and lowering of the form. First, when entering through the form through a few words, chanting like, "Darkness of the Light, Gods of Chaos, Answer my call and give me my power back, give me my God's powers, give me my Dark Judgment, so i may Judge these, and give a Punishment, to thine all gods, Give me thine POWER!". When this is chanted about 3 or so times, his skin will begin to turn darker, more of a gray or a blackish color, his wings growing more intense and gaining feathers instead of scales. Usually the Arm mechanisms will also take a transformation, giving a more demonic appearance as the metals shift towards a few curved spikes pointing downwards, and about, the main spike showing a lot of chakra if used as such. His hair will become flat and pointed down, his hairline being perfectly arranged in a forward cut, giving him a good advantage over sight.

During this state of mind, his motions will become 15% faster, and 50% more strength. His chakra levels will stay the same, along with his normal actions. But 20 minutes(4 posts) into the transformation, or within an intense battle state, his mind will be set on pure death in battle, or true annihilation. Hence his Nickname, 'Leader of Death', his appearance will take on the impression of a dark god. The aftereffects of using this form is severe, if not fatal, when transforming back, his internal organs will face severe damage based on how much power he used, the fact being as the speed and strength will receed into a large seal on his right torso half.

~Jutsu~

Doton Elemental Jutsu

Name: Chain Release. • Earth Shift.
Rank: C
Element: Doton[Earth Release.]
Description: Utilizing his ability to use chains in any motion he sees fit, he can pound his chains into the ground, channeling chakra into the chains and int the ground, which can violently shift the ground in any direction he chooses. This can be used as a trap, and a defensive move. This does not affect areas with grass or plants. The ground will just be moved upwards, depending on the thickness of roots.

Name: Spike Release. • Earth Slash.
Rank: B
Element: Doton[Earth Release.]
Description: Using his spike as a medium for his Earth chakra, he is able to harshly force it against the ground, he can highly increase it's attack power by lessening it's speed, giving it a good advantage within close-ranged fighting. This technique usually takes about 5.5 seconds to pull off when in thick ground. Anything higher than rock can slow down the Jutsu a bit more, but also increase it's power by the same amount.

Name: Chain Release. • Dark Annihilation.
Rank: A
Element: Doton[Earth Release.]
Description: Using his ability to manipulate chains, Ruin is able to use chains to grasp a large potion of something, and use the earth around it as a medium for spikes. Snapping his fingers, if infused with Doton chakra, the earth around his wrapped target will force upwards into large spikes, and stay that way unless destroyed. These spikes are dense depending on the earth they were used with, and will pierce through some density metal depending on such.

Name: Dark Hail.
Rank: S
Element: Doton[Earth Release.]
Description: Using his ability to manipulate chains and his weapons, Ruin is able to raise his hands towards the sky after throwing a set of chains into the air. Forming the Dragon hand seal, he is able to turn the chain links into individual pieces. With this, he can utilize the earth over or in the chains to make it turn into spikes or something highly more deadly. If the chain links hit the ground, it will sink into the ground, and pounce back upwards and bounce back until it is called off, or Ruin ceases the Jutsu from movement.

Name: Spike Release. • Annihilation.
Rank: S
Element: Doton[Earth Release.]
Description: Using his spikes as a medium for a large mass of chakra. Stabbing the Earth Sealed spike into the ground, he can conduct a large tremor in the ground, and can even shatter large masses of ground, but it has to be straight in front of him. This tremor can be to a Magnitude of 5.6, to 6.0 if used enough chakra to do so. This is a length range of 70m at most, and can only be used once every so often, due to the mass of chakra release needed for the utilization of the Jutsu.

Katon Elemental Jutsu

Name: Chain Release. • Flare.
Rank: D
Element: Katon[Fire Release.]
Description: Using his ability to manipulate chains, Ruin can swing around a couple of his chains to create a small flare of fire on each of the links, causing them to be more vicious to impact any object. The fire can shift onto other objects, and begin to burn them easily, depending on the material.

Name: Spike Release. • Single Force
Rank: C
Element: Katon[Fire Release.]
Description: Forcing his Fire sealed spike forward, he can release a small wave of fire in a ring or a stream in front of his position. This fire is more of a blackish to an orange color, depending on mood and chakra control. Using this to any advantage, he can combined it with his 'Earth Slash' for a higher power and more speed for both. Combining both Jutsu would raise the rank to B.

Name: Dark Spike Release • Burning Legion
Rank: A
Element: Katon[Fire Release.]
Description: Using his Fire sealed spike, he can release a powerful wave of fire in a stream or a pulse if he will move his arm forward, then back, or the opposite. This stream can burn through some density metal, and is partially similar to 'Herukasai' as he can use this stream as a medium to form a ball of fire from above him, and use it with the control of chakra to be able to manipulate it's movements. It's a smaller version, with little to no explosions.

Name: Dark Inferno.
Rank: S
Element: Katon[Fire Release.]
Description: Using his ability to manipulate chains and his spikes, he will throw a dozen chain links all around him in a seal formation and will preform the Dragon, Rat, Dog, Cat, and Bird hand seals. With these, he will be able to throw a massive wall of fire and manipulate it, without moving his body, to any direction he sees fit. This takes a large amount of chakra and can only move in one direction at a time, unless in Second form. Second form, it uses a quarter more of chakra, and can be used in two directions at once.

Name: Hell. - Heru.
Rank: S
Element: Katon[Fire release.]
Description: This Jutsu can only be preformed within the Second Form, and uses nearly 75% of max chakra. Utilizing his Spike mechanisms, he can release a powerful, if not annihilation-level blast of fire chakra through the air in a Star-like formation, and will use his wings as a medium to push that fire away from him, and in one direction. This fire chakra is able to be placed in the air and to the ground if necessary. This blast is able to shatter rocks and earth, along with some density metal, if not already melting it, and can push back wind away if needed. If Combined with the Fuuton element, the flames will be higher and more destructive.

Normal Jutsu

Name: Fuuja Houin - Evil Sealing Method
Rank: A
Element: -
Description: Fuuja Houin is a Fuuinjutsu technique used to counter-act the effects of a cursed seal. The ninja writes the needed seal characters on the ground and body of the person cursed with the seal. The ninja then forms the needed hand seals and places his hand over the cursed seal and then activates the written seal. The seal characters will then retreat to surround the cursed seal in a circular seal. Though the Fuuja Houin can work well against lesser seals, it will not be able to fully stop a cursed seal placed by a powerful, skilled ninja.

Name: Fuuka Houin - Fire Sealing Method
Rank: B
Element: -
Description: Fuuka Houin is a Fuuinjutsu technique that allows the ninja to seal away a nearby fire. After unrolling a scroll to hold the fire, the ninja writes the needed sealing incantation onto the scroll. Then by forming the needed handseals, a vapor will emanate from the scroll to encompass the fire and take it back to the scroll for sealing.

Name: Gofuu Kekkai - Five Seal Barrier
Rank: A
Element: -
Description: Gofuu Kekkai is a Fuuinjutsu technique utilized by Akatsuki. The five "kin" (prohibition) seals act together to form a barrier to the entrance of their cave. The cave door itself is marked with one tag, and four other tags are located within a few hundred meters of each other. To remove the barrier, all five tags must be removed at the same moment.

Name: Shikoku Fuuin - Finger Engraving Seal
Rank:
Element:
Description: Shikoku Fuuin is a Fuuinjutsu technique. By forming the needed sealing chakra on his finger, Ruin can engrave a message into an object.

~History/RP Sample~

History/Background Story:

Birth Arc
In the night, the Red full moon above the Shinobi hospital of the Getsugakure no Sato, back before it was annihilated, Ruin was born from the sKunochi named Kari. His mother was kind to him the first few years of his life, before he was able to grow much of anything for his living infant body. Though he was born under a Demon moon, a loved part of the Amizaru, he was lightly scorned for his black and changing color eyes and hair. Though it only shifted every so often, It was more of a Kazura trait, and partially a Narame trait, then an Amizaru trait. Kari's relationship with her husband was questions, and she was Executed for her treason against the clan. So Ruin was left motherless for about half of his life, before he was ready to go off and train on his own. His sister had helped him through and through, and even trained him in a few things with some ease. His power was increased by whatever through the first 300 years, when his looks looked like he was 5 years old.

Forgotten Memories.
Once he had learned a few things about his birth, near the time he was fully realized about his own self, and his memory was sealed off from anything that was letting him remember his family, and past. Even though he was dubbed the Leader of the Amizaru, any of it's secrets were sealed off from his mind. And so, he tries to search for his past, even for any cost.

Recent Memories
Ruin had become an Akatsuki not five years after becoming a Rouge Ninja from where he hailed from previously, taken in by the previous Akatsuki leader, who had perished in battle. An honorable way to die, quick and steady up into the arms of the beholder. He did not believe in a simple god, he believed in many from those who were around him. Religion did nothing for him, quickly passing it by when the people around him died off, leaving him alone in the lone Akatsuki base, to wander around aimlessly, the possessions of the ones that were deceased burned as firewood to keep him warm during the winter months. Enduring is what he did best, as an Amizaru of course.

Enduring through four years of Solidity in the base, occasionally wandering out to see the world, get fresh air for a couple months, go back to training his body to endure what would be insanity, he became ready to just call off the idiocy of the Ninja world, hating it for it's constant lengthy wars. When he stood atop the Base, high up in the air, he always thought to himself why he would not be named the Akatsuki leader, he had the power to obliterate who he wanted in a snap of his fingers, and would be able to decimate higher level opponents with ease. His speed wasn't too great with his extra attachments, but his power was unmatched by his knowledge. Even those in the other branches of his clan feared him, whenever he came for an annual visit.

After the long waiting, another two years passed by his vision, his training not ceasing by the years, his body firmly toned enough to be able to carry the burden of his chains. He was ready to be named the new Akatsuki leader, and so since there were no Akatsuki roaming the world, he would be named the Leader of the Akatsuki in the recent years.


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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeMon 23 Jan 2012, 12:21 am

Change the SS ranks to S.

And while I'll approve it, could you not have been a little more unique with your weapon. I mean, a keyblade?

Other then that, this is satisfactory.
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeMon 23 Jan 2012, 12:26 am

Appropriated.
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeMon 23 Jan 2012, 12:26 am

Approverated.
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeMon 23 Jan 2012, 1:10 am

Wait wait wait. I didnt read everything, so i might have missed an explination on it. But how exactly are we approving immortal characters now?
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeMon 23 Jan 2012, 1:30 am

I assumed it was a "mortal immortality", if that makes sense.

A killing blow is still a killing blow, he's simply immune to ageing. He gets his throat slit, or contracts a lethal disease, he's dead all the same.
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeMon 23 Jan 2012, 9:08 am

Dont just assume something when approving an app, clarify every detail. Especially if one of theit abilities just says "immortality".
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeMon 23 Jan 2012, 2:10 pm

I previously talked to him about it, my use of the word assume, was incorrect. I apologize.

Furthermore, if you wish to be part of the approval process, I suggest you resume your role as a staff member, whereupon I'd be more then pleasant should you choose to interfere with said process, or undertake it yourself. Until then, members are not only not allowed to post in this area, but by posting in this area, and attempting to correct me, you undermine my authority. This would be perfectly acceptable should you return to your staff position, but once again, until that occurs, I'll have to ask you to refrain from posting here.
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeMon 23 Jan 2012, 4:25 pm

The Amizaru are not Complete Immortals. They are Immortals based on those who can die by normal means.

-Ahem-

They can die by normal means, all means, Disease, Wounds, Blood loss, etc. They just live for vast amounts of time, with less aging. They can die with a blunt force to the head, just like a normal person can, for those who are Skeptical.
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeSat 04 Feb 2012, 12:19 am

I would love this to be Stamped and moved.. :/
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeSat 04 Feb 2012, 8:47 am

Extreme strength. Explain. And... how is it 50% higher? O.o

Same goes for your character's stamina. Add description about these two specialties.


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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeSat 04 Feb 2012, 9:52 am

Remove the bonus strength and stamina you have, or at least lower them seeing as 1, you don't have Taijutsu, so having that much bonus strength doesn't make to much sense. And as for the stamina. Idc much about the stamina, but just lower it seeing as you have a "second form" that enhances all of these.
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeSat 04 Feb 2012, 3:27 pm

Edited, I guess. >_>
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeSat 04 Feb 2012, 9:06 pm

You still need to explain about Ruin's immense strength. Describe what he is capable of.
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeSat 04 Feb 2012, 9:45 pm

.-. There's something.
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PostSubject: Re: Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader]   Ruin Tentu Amizaru [Akat Leader] Icon_minitimeSun 05 Feb 2012, 5:42 pm

- Approved
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